添削体験記17: ほぼ満足の課題

Lesson７の２回目の提出を終え、feedbackが返ってきた。※私が今受講しているのは　「中級インテンシブ・プログラム」の全12回です。

直されたところを修正したのだから「完璧」なはずだが、今まで何かとそうは行かなかった。

今回、いいんじゃないの!?
満足の出来♡

良くリクエストが書けているね、とGarry先生。

Lesson7に来て、ようやく満足～
この調子で頑張ります！！！

From: K Ideguchi
Date: xxxxxxxxxx
To: info@fujox.com
Subject: Page-2-Print software purchasing order

Dear Mr. Suzumoto,

Hello, my name is K Ideguchi, an Illustrator for Whitegoods Incorporated based in Tokyo.We are planning to purchase 10 “Page-2-Print” software licenses at an your earliest convenience. Before we purchase, I’d like to ask you if our requests are acceptable. Could you take them into consideration, please?

First of all, we are wondering if you could provide unlimited telephone support upon purchasing. We would like our designers to get used to using this new software as soon as possible as any transition time could disrupt our production schedule. Your telephone support will help us have a smooth transition/changeover（この単語のほうが適している）.
In addition, is it possible to provide an in-house training session for our designers upon purchasing? Having face-to-face training will allow them to ask direct questions
when using the actual software.
Furthermore, if you plan to upgrade this software within a few months, could you offer us a free upgrade when the new version is available? We need to purchase the software as soon as possible as our company is planning to upgrade our entire computer network to Windows 7 in two months.
Lastly, we are wondering if you could offer the a 20% discount on our 10 license purchasings this time. We only have 7 designers but will buy
3 extra licenses for future needs. It would be very appreciated if you can offer the discount on the estimated price of $12,000.

We truly appreciate your kind consideration of/for the above and look forward to hearing a positive reply from you hopefully by the end of this week.

Sincerely yours,

K Ideguchi
Illustrator, Design department
Whitegoods Incorporated
1-2-3 Shinagawa, Shinagawa-ku,
Tokyo 123-4567
P.xxx-xxxx
F.xxx-xxxx
HP: www.xxx.xxx

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