添削体験記10: 英文メール・今までで一番の出来♡

From: K. Ideguchi <kayo.ideguchi@hiflite.com>
Date: February 19, 20XX
To: Rebecca Santiago <Rebecca.Santiago@hiflite.com>
Cc:
Subject: Additional purchase requestDear Rebecca,

 

I’m do not use conjunctions in business emails （またやってしまった！ビジネスでは省略形はNGでした！）e-mailing you today to ask for unnecessary （for は不要）your permission to purchase new design software, called “Page-2-Print” which is necessary to prep　（前置詞違う） upgrading prep（前置詞違う）Windows 7. the way you had it worded it was necessary to have this new software to upgrade to Windows 7 （→この言い方だと、Windowsアップグレードにこのソフトが必要、という意図になるよ、の指摘）Our company is planning to upgrade pronoun （代名詞）entire PCs ww （単語違い。computerでしょうか…？）to Windows 7 in two months; however, we’ve found out that the software our design department is currently using, Final Draft, does not support this @ （冠詞違い）new Windows 7. Unfortunately, we were not aware of this problem when the company budget was planned.

In order to meet the upgrading timeline, we would like to buy a site license for new software, Page-2-Print, on 7 computers in our office. The total cost for this purchase will be $12,000. Page-2-Print can work exactly the same as the current software, Final Draft, and run on Windows 7, so there will be no problem at all for replacing the software.

I am （I’m と省略形にしていました(>_<)）aware that this is an additional purchasing request and should have noticed this problem earlier; however, we need this new software to meet the company’s computer upgrading timeline. I also believe Page-2-Print will allow us to carry out our daily tasks smoothly and ease daily operations. Could you kindly give us a permission to proceed with this purchase?

I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards,

 

K. Ideguchi

Illustrator, Design department